A Long Wait


Before the birth of the night
and the accompanying rain,
The sky was in no pain;
She was bold and all blue,
Her evening dress clear and new,
The clouds put up a happy show;
Roaring thuds and fire flashes in a tow,
She whimpered,
Wind brewed and willows danced;
Mother Nature stirr’d up her brood,
Frogs croaked, worms wiggled and cows mooed;
Palpable, so happy a mood,
Swallows flit as the sky hued to nimbus;
From the sweet orange and scattered yellow cumulus,
Unwrapping scents
of the rain on dry earth and the sun mellows,
The muse lain with me on a heap of feather pillows,
Hills and ridges fuddled all night as at the sea,
Wide was the gulf
between your lips and mine, my queen bee;

Longing for the night, you’ll be unafraid of me.

Comments

  1. Not big on poems, but I read them. Some are sublime, some are tiresome. This one is of the former. It's so pure I hardly understood it, but I suspect on an unconscious level I understood every word. The words flow easily from the lips of the mind as one reads. Now, let me take another look and see if I can succeed at uncovering the hidden depths!

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    1. Disclaimer: the persona too 'does not understand' what they put together. Lol!
      Keep on reading on, asante.

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    2. I get it now. It's about the divine feminine as personified by nature and creativity. There's a juxtaposition of how nature provides for all living things and how the muse provides inspiration for all creative beings. At the end, there is a whimper of longing as the poet pines for more inspiration, perhaps as the creatures yearned for the rains. How did I do?

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    3. I like your views on this piece...and i must say, it nearly mirrors mine; what the persona had in mind while crafting it. You did fairly well, keep it up. *slow clap*

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  2. I like short poems, i love how your word flow with ease, the pictures were creating in my head as i read.
    I like it....I don't��......i love it.����

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    1. I appreciate you read me, Tony. The length is unpredictable as goals to achieve are diverse. It would be interesting to know what kind of 'pictures' formed in your mind as you read this piece. Say it here. Hahah!

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  3. It's like a mix of sorts in terms of imagery and theme.

    The shift from calm and day to night and rain usually stands for change... The bitter kind.


    But nooo! Plot twist is upon us. It kinda went on to a lovers kinda vibe.


    But i like it. I love this. Keep up😎😎😂

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    1. Hahahh! Nel, what's this 'bitter kind'? So many plots and twists, images and themes, shifts and changes (I am actually using your own words. Lol!) Keep it at loving it, all the time.

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  4. I swear I had such a beautiful life last December. Happy and without pain like the sky in the poem. But then I saw this lass in January. Wait a minute...she saw me. And boy did my life start changing. True story. And that's the memory lane I found myself walking as soon as I started reading the poem. The end of my story and the end of the poem might be headed in different directions. But I surely did find the entire work awesome. You know the feeling you get when you can relate to some literary work on some personal level. That's what I am talking about.
    P.S. If only there was emoji to show help in emphasising my reaction. ahahahaah

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    1. I hear you Mario, I hear you. The good thing about the sky is, it is always up there, ready to experience any weather (i mean, you can have a peaceful, 'painless' sky/weather any other time, not all months are January *muffles a sly laughter*). Yes, we'll find a suitable emoji on these streets soon. Thank you for reading me.

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